1 Revise a Formal Memo FORMAL MEMO Revise a formal memo to i

1. Revise a Formal Memo

FORMAL MEMO: Revise a formal memo to improve the \"You-Attitude.\" See Unit 2, Module 6, p. 99

Imagine you are a manager in an office building undergoing some renovations. A member of your staff, perhaps your secretary, writes the following memo:

Subject: Status of Building Renovations

We are happy to announce that the renovation of the lobby is not behind schedule. By Monday, October 9, we should be ready to open the west end of the lobby to limited traffic.

The final phase of the renovation will be placing a new marble floor in front of the elevators. This work will not be finished until the end of the month.

Please exercise caution when moving through the construction area. The floor will be uneven and steps will be at unusual heights. Watch your step to avoid accidental tripping or falling.

While not a poorly written memo grammatically speaking, there are many ways this memo can be revised to reflect principles discussed in LO 6.1 - LO 6.5. See, too, the sample letter on p. 95 as it also lacks the \"You-Attitude.\" Note: Do not just add words. Revise what is here.

This is Module 6

Subject: Status of Building Renovations We are happy to announce that the renovation of the lobby is not behind schedule. By Monday, October 9, we should be ready to open the west end of the lobby to limited traffic. The final phase of the renovation will be placing a new marble floor in front of the elevators. This work will not be finished until the end of the month. We will attempt to schedule most of the work during the evenings so that normal business is not disrupted. Please exercise caution when moving through the construction area. The floor will be uneven and steps will be at unusual heights. Watch your step to avoid accidental tripping or falling.

Solution

We are happy to announce that the renovation of the lobby is not behind schedule. By Monday, October 9, the west end will be ready to open to traffic. The final phase of the renovation will be placing a new marble floor in front of the elevators. This work will not be finished until the end of the month.

Most of the work will be scheduled during the evenings so that normal business is not disrupted. Caution is to. Ne exercised when moving through the construction area. The floor will be uneven and steps will be at unusual heights. Hence accidental tripping or falling is to be avoided.